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thank you soooo much con and english boy
really i learned a lot from my mistakes
con
about your question
you said that i should n't start with a dialogue
we studied in our book something called
a hook in the intro
it is the most important thing in the essay
and our teacher made us practice in it a loooot
if you don't write a good hook you will lose a lot of marks
this is the definition for the hook
A hook is a sentence or group of sentences or a phrase in the introduction that "hooks" or draws the reader in. Basically it can be a question,quotation,statistics and a scenario like i did
^_*
and writing a short essay it is a habit and my teacher always says that
i write super fast in the exsams because of the time
and this essay i wrote it fast because of the time also i was extremely busy yesterday
i will work hard on your notes guys and i hope i will n't do these mistakes again
well done teachers