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قديم 30-08-2013, 01:47 PM   #3

LeLou

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Hi everyone
how are you .. i hope you are fine
plz can you check my paragraph
i write this paragraph for the english exam ..
it will be in 26/10
thank you *
miss.soshi

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"Write About Chimps"

"CHIMPS"

Chimps are one of the intelligent animals in the world. It is a kind of the monkeys subfamily. These intelligent monkeys live in western and central Africa. It have a very long arms and the arms are longer than legs . Also it have a short body and it coverd with black hair on most of their body. Chimps have senses very similiar to the humens senses, including hearing, sight, smell, taste and touch. In addition male chimps are larger than the females. To sum up, chimps have amazing characteristics that not found in another animals.

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I'm not correcting the introduction right now because I'm tired and headache.
I'll only correct your paragraph..

You should have wrote:

'one of the most intelligent animals'


'They are one of monkeys family'
In biology, there's no thing such as subfamily.
If you wanted to say
فصيلة
then family is the right word.


'They have very long arms that are longer than their legs'


'Also, they have a short body and most of it is covered with black hair'
or
'Most of their short body is covered with black hair'


'similiar' should be written this way: 'similar'
'humens' should be written this way: 'humans'
or: human beings


You should add a colon after 'including'.


You should add a comma after 'in addition'.


'that are not found in any other animal'

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I hope that helped.
Good luck on your exam
:)

 

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