محتاج احد يصحح لي الـ Essay

[الفتى]

السلام عليكم ورحمة الله وبركاته



الحين اختبار الرايتنج 216 ساعة ونص , وانا كتبت المقال هذا عن غرق جدة اخذ مني ثلاث ساعات !

الله يعين بس ..

الله يخليكم احد يتبرع ويصحح لي البراقراف اكون له من الشاكرين ..


JEDDAH FLOODS


zzzzzz The floods, are a persistent problem in Jeddah. And the reason of this negligence, are the contractors, so I think there are several solutions to this prpblem.

zzzzzz First of all, the government should not give the contractors
the full authority to mange the projects. Because, there
are many tunnels created by them were not compatible with
international standars. Also, we can see the evidence every
day in our streets.

zzzzzzz Second things, that is to allow the foreign companise to do the local projects. In addition, there is an agreement between that company and our government, also there is a time limit for ending project.

zzzzzzzz Finally, we should reconsider the level of the contractors who will manage the project in our country. Furthermore, our government should create an Auditors to reduce froud.

zzzzzzz Aresult of these proposals, all citizens will enjoy in happy life with best services in all cities of our country. Also they will not fare of flooding, that we dont know when it will be ends.



المقال اكيد مليان اخطاء بس اتمنى اعرفها ..

[Conscientious]

طيب عادي اذا زبط في المقال ولا بس اصحح القرامر

علما اني ما بدخل في الافكار بس بضيف كلمات تقوي المقال

؟؟؟؟؟؟؟؟؟؟

[الفتى]

الله يخليك ابغا اعرف اذا المقال هذا فيه اخطاء او لا ؟؟

واذا فيه اخطاء اتمنى اعرفها ..


جزاك الله خير على ردك .

[Conscientious]

JEDDAH FLOODS


zzzzzz The floods are a persistent problem in Jeddah. The reason of this problem is the negligence of the contractors. However, we still have several solutions to solve problem.

zzzzzz First of all, the government should not give the contractors
the full authority to manage the projects. And this is because there
are many tunnels created by them are not compatible with
international standers. And the evidence is what we are seeing every day in our streets.

zzzzzzz The second solution is allowing the foreign companies to do the local projects. For example the government and the company can make (or contract) an agreement between them in which there is a limited time for ending the projects.

zzzzzzzz Third , we should reconsider the level of the contractors who will manage the project in our country. Furthermore, our government should create an auditors to reduce froud.

zzzzzzz As a result of these solutions , all citizens will enjoy happy life with best services in all cities in our country. Also they will not be scared of flooding that we don't know when it will be end.

اللي بالاحمر مافهمتها عشان اعدلها كلمه auditors معناها مستمعون .... ما فهمت ؟؟

[Conscientious]

طيب خلاص ان شاء الله اقولك على كل الاخطاء وكيف انا عدلتها

بس متى الاختبار ؟؟؟

[الفتى]

auditors = مدققون , يعني هم لجنة مراقبة : مهمتهم مراقبة اداء العمل (هيئة رقابة)

[الفتى]

الاختبار يوم السبت القادم

[الفتى]

ولو شكل الأخطاء كثيره :(

شكل مافيه حاجه صح إلا كلمة " السلام عليكم ورحمة الله وبركاته " اللي فوق الموضوع :(

[رغد محمد]

^^^^^^^

~....You are sOoOo funny man

!...Don't be upset, you wrote an essay

??...Do you know what is an essay means

You made something very important, and you have to be proud of yourself borther

Be happy and think you have a chance to learn from now until Saterday

??....OK

You have the best correcter ever soOo don't worry; she will help you

Have a nice day and try to be a posstive person

،’

[Conscientious]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة الفتى ولو شكل الأخطاء كثيره :( شكل مافيه حاجه صح إلا كلمة " السلام عليكم ورحمة الله وبركاته " اللي فوق الموضوع :(

هههههههههههههههههههههههههه

لا يالفتى بالعكس احس انك تطورت كثير عن اول

بالنسبه للقرامر ممتاز وما صححت فيه كثير

بس توصيلك للمعلومه هو اللي عدلت فيه

وفي حاجه مهمه الافكار لازم تكون متناسقه يعني مثلا تعطي الحل وبعدين تشرح طريقه تنفيذ الحل بدون ما تدخل مواضيع ثانيه

الان ان شاء الله بقولك على كل الاخطاء في ملف وورد اوك

بالتوفيق اخي

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة رغد محمد ^^^^^^^ ~....You are sOoOo funny man !...Don't be upset, you wrote an essay ??...Do you know what is an essay means You made something very important, and you have to be proud of yourself borther Be happy and think you have a chance to learn from now until Saterday ??....OK You have the best correcter ever soOo don't worry; she will help you Have a nice day and try to be a posstive person ،’

i'll respond soon on ur post (god willing ), just let me do the correction