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[حلاها زايد]

unfortunately alot of things make me angry and this causes to me alot of problems in my life
I will tell you some of the things that make me angry
when I see someone hurt or hit a child and when someone injustice me and when men thinking that women just a servant cook and wash and raise the children as a machine and don't need to rest and compassion and tenderness
and when someone looks at me for along time maybe you surprised that but really this makes me very angry


do you believe that when I wrote this topic made me angry


I wish anyone to correct my mistake

[رغد محمد]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة حلاها زايد unfortunately alot of things make me angry and this causes to me alot of problems in my life I will tell you some of the things that make me angry when I see someone hurt or hit a child and when someone injustice me, and when men thinking that women just a servant cook , wash ,raise the children as a machine, don't need to rest , compassion ,and tenderness Tel me about it !!!!!!!! I know and when someone looks at me for along time maybe you surprised that but really this makes me very angry hhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh hhhhhhh weird really " do you believe that when I wrote this topic made me angry hhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh h You are sooooooooooo angry .You have to be calm in sometimes ok control yourself I wish anyone to correct my mistake

listen , as I see your write is geting better ,and better,but when you wrote a list you have to put comma and in the end you put and
did you get me ???

[Conscientious]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة حلاها زايد unfortunately alot of things make me angry and this causes to me alot of problems in my life I will tell you some of the things that make me angry when I see someone hurt or hit a child and when someone injustice ( wrong) because u should use verb not noun me and when men thinking that woman just a servant , cook and wash and raise the children as a machine and dosen't need to rest and compassion and tenderness <<<i'm not sure about the usage of this word and when someone looks at me for a long time u may say , wen someone gaze at me for a long period and Allah knows the best maybe you are surprised at that but really this makes me very angry do you believe that when I wrote this topic , it made me angry I wish anyone to correct my mistake

yellow =should b dropped
the red letters= should be added
the red words =the substitute

with pleasure

any Q ask me plz