الرايتنج مجنني

[رغد محمد]

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Hiiiiiiiii friends Really, I miss you all and I can’t express what my heart maintains for you I’m very happy to see your essays, interaction and participating during my absence, I found a lot of positive comments and attachments which I couldn’t check them carefully. In addition of that, you show quick ability to learn and implement what you have learnt recently

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~...Hello Mr.Fahad
~...Welcome... Welcome
Thank you for your beautiful emotions big brother
Really, I appreciate your words. Thank you

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I did quick scan for your essays and I desired to provide my notes to you

This is what we looking for, someone shows us our mistakes

Thank you soOo much and please tolorate us a little bit
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Teacher Raghad (in the near future)

I hope that from my deapest heart>>
Thank you .. thank you
Ameeeen Yarab Al alameen

You know, I always thank Allah coz he made me meet my best friend and teacher "Conscience". In fact, she is the best teacher ever, and she is the person who teach me how to write, I will never ever forget here at all
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Actually, I have one Q: Can you tell me if al Malak Al Abyad's sentence is correct or not coz I's not sure of that. I want to understand it much better please
:This is the sentence

While this saying have some merit on surface, however when children spend more than four hours daily on television, then they would probably watch some bad inappropriate scenes such as violence, sex, or they might hear a bad use for language which they would apply it later as a part of their imitation of their loveable characters like Batman or Superman.

Thank you again Mr. Fahad
See you soon
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[جبل طارق]

الخاتمة يجب ان تكون فيها نصائح واقتراحات ونصح الناس كافة عن وقف التدخين وايضا في الاماكن العامه

[Violetta]

مرحبا بنات,
رجاءاً شوفولي دا المقال عارفة انو في اشياء ناقصة بس ماني عارفة اش اكتب...

[ياسمينة الشام]

What is the most subject and possible come in the exam .. How do we know the most important of them...
thank u

[ابو فهد*]

Dear Raghad

While this saying have some merit on surface

This sentence is quite lateral translation which is most common mistake

however when children spend more than four hours daily on television, then they would probably watch some bad inappropriate scenes such as violence, sex, or they might hear a bad use for language which they would apply it later as a part of their imitation of their loveable characters like Batman or Superman.

These thesis statements are little complicated, pleas see my correction

However, some children spend almost four hours daily watching TV, so they might watch some bad or inappropriate scenes, such as acts of violence, sexual photos, or hear a bad use of language. They would apply that later as a part of their behavior, they do that to imitate their loveable characters, like Batman and Superman

Violetta

You are welcome and our teachers will check your writing soon, plaese excuse me now because my Internet connection is very low, after tomorrow I will be in Jeddah and I will check it

Note: don't hesitate to ask me about anything, but after tomorrow, because my writing exam will be on Sat. 9/7/1432


Best regards

[Violetta]

Well, but my writing exam will be on Tues on 5/7

[ياسمينة الشام]

Anchallah my exam will be the second Wednesday , why you are different and maby my time is error??

[رغد محمد]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Violetta مرحبا بنات, رجاءاً شوفولي دا المقال عارفة انو في اشياء ناقصة بس ماني عارفة اش اكتب...

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~....Hiiiiii Violetta honey

...I didn't see you for a long time ago. I hope you are ok dear

This is my correction darling, and I want you know that your way to organize the essay is wrong dear. You don't have to write Intoduction, Body, or conclusin" We know that already. You have to write it like an essay, Ok ?? Another thing I want to tell which is your writing

~....Honey

Your writing and ideas are amaaaazing Masha'allh Tabark Allah, Really I not joking at all. You have a numbers of words and knowledge that I admir your writing

May Allah protect you and help you to achive what you are looking for

See ya dear



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المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة ياسمينة الشام What is the most subject and possible come in the exam .. How do we know the most important of them... thank u

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..Hiii dear

I don't know honey. I hope anyone else who have the knowledge to help you

Thanks for your visiting



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[رغد محمد]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة ابو فهد* However, some children spend almost four hours daily watching TV, so they might watch some bad or inappropriate scenes, such as acts of violence, sexual photos, or hear a bad use of language. They would apply that later as a part of their behavior, they do that to imitate their loveable characters, like Batman and Superman Best regards

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Hello Mr.Abu Fahad

Your sentences are much better which help the reader to understand what you want to say to them

Masha'allah Tabark Allah

May Allah reward you for your caring. Really I apprecaite what your doing to us

I learn lots of thing from you and more than you know

Thanks alot



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المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Violetta Well, but my writing exam will be on Tues on 5/7

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...Honey

If you need to any help just ask. Do'nt be shy ok. Just ask and we will help if we can

Take care dear

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المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة ياسمينة الشام Anchallah my exam will be the second Wednesday , why you are different and maby my time is error??

Maybe because she has a different teacher than you, or she have the same teacher but she take the course in a different time

??...Get it

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[الملاك الأبيض]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Violetta مرحبا بنات, رجاءاً شوفولي دا المقال عارفة انو في اشياء ناقصة بس ماني عارفة اش اكتب...

hi violeta

how r u ? allow me to share my comments about your essay

first of all you have a good compile of words Masha Allah and this is a good thing for writing .

second you r not suppose to abbreviate words like "ads"

another thing u should not put the introduction like this way
when we write an essay we suppose to put it as a whole portion divided into paragraphs , but still all together not like you did with your introduction.
something else i noticed that your paragraphs is very short nevertheless it has many information, yet they still so small and short ,and this is very clear in your conclusion.
you also didn't write a nice conclusion to end with strong emotion or quote u only wrote the reasons with out any result , you must to expand your conclusion into one that has a good result or solution or quote


thats all ,and please forgeve me if i bothered u in any way , yet we r here to be useful for each other and not to be flattering

regards to all of you and you will find other notes in the attachment . .