the (perfect essay writing) competition

[English boy]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة الملاك الأبيض hi every body , actually I'm so thankful for all of ur efforts and especially our judges and teachers con and English boy u were professional in ur correction and we have so many benefits of our mistakes though , i have my own notes about ur correction for my essay and i will clarify it for u to convince me with ur correction if i was wrong : 1- this sentence u get me so wrong in it : This) is our situation for a the whole one month called Ramadan . Ramadan is the month of fasting .a month of and worshiping ,a month which unlike any other month of the year >> what i mean that i put"a" before the word "whole " because this month that I'm talking about is not identified yet. thats why i did n't put " the " like u did in ur correction then i mentioned that this month is called "Ramadan " only then i could put " the " not "a" 2- with their relatives in Ramadan for break fast or for Sohoor and this thing(which) shows the closeness and the support between them >> this sentence i believe i should n't omit the word " with " because its making the meaning much connected and the word "the" before "closeness &support "should stay to have better arranged sentence , other wise the meaning of this sentence won't be perfect another thing , that i confess that i have so many run-on sentence which give disadvantages in my writing and i have to work on this part and i have a repeated words in my essay and some silly mistakes cuz i was in a hurry , but no matter if i win or lose it was my pleasure to participate with u and to be corrected from a great teachers like u con and English boy it was an honor to me cuz i learned too many things from ur correction more than i learned from my centra teachers .and I'm looking forward to have another stage for this competition and especially con i really thank u for ur great efforts with us may allah bless u all guys :)

Con .. plz help me with this >> I'm so stuck ..

[Conscientious]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة English boy Con .. plz help me with this >> I'm so stuck ..

it's not my bussiness , u r the one who mastaked her first and i imitated u

looooooool

i'll run away

[English boy]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Conscientious it's not my bussiness , u r the one who mastaked her first and i imitated u looooooool i'll run away

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you've got to be kidding me

[رغد محمد]

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Hello everybody

I'm back ... sOoOrry I was taking a rest of everything in my life>>and still

I miss you sOoOo much … I want to be honest with you sisters
and brother … I'm sOoOo happy that I was participate in this wonderful competition… I learned lots of things

Conscientious honey … whenever you are, you are glamour

Really since I now you, I became a different person … Thank you dear …Really thank you for everything honey… You are magnificent teacher... I will not forget you my friend... Never ever at all … you the reason after Allah to what I become right now … Thank you honey ...>> crying

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English boy … You are amazing teacher …really thank you

You made me feel happy with your words … I don't know what to say to both of you except I will pray and pray for both of you… I will not forget you at all ..Thanks ..Yeh .. right amm Congratulation for your new job

Really I've learned a lot … Thanks

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Ammmm

؟Can I ask you something? Am I the winner

Can if I'm the winner, I can't accept that … I'm sOoOorry I can't accept it really I can't coz I deliver my essay after the time that you give it to us

I just want know my mistakes nothing more … I wasn't looking for winning or anything else

؟؟؟Do you understand me

SoOoOo, the White Engle is the winner of this amazing competition

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I'm surprise that I took the highest marks … Really I feel proud of myself … that I've changed in one year … When I remember myself last year, I found that I was such a beginner in this language… however, I feel now much different that before

Con ... Thank you dear ... you are my best teacher ever … May Allah protect you and help you to be in health

May Allah reward you for everything you did it for me

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Ammmm

؟؟I'm sOoOo happy in this moment … I don't know why

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Malak … I congratulate you for being the winner… You deserve the best honey

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Miss … You are copy of me before … I've changed I wish I can back to be like you enthusiasm person ... Please be you and don't change honey … since I knew you, you still enthusiasm person … Masha'Allah … May Allah protect you dear … Thank you for your wonderful idea … Thank you from my heart

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Raghad

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[English boy]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة رغد محمد ،’ Hello everybody I'm back ... sOoOrry I was taking a rest of everything in my life>>and still I miss you sOoOo much … I want to be honest with you sisters and brother … I'm sOoOo happy that I was participate in this wonderful competition… I learned lots of things Conscientious honey … whenever you are, you are glamour Really since I now you, I became a different person … Thank you dear …Really thank you for everything honey… You are magnificent teacher... I will not forget you my friend... Never ever at all … you the reason after Allah to what I become right now … Thank you honey ...>> crying ،’ English boy … You are amazing teacher …really thank you You made me feel happy with your words … I don't know what to say to both of you except I will pray and pray for both of you… I will not forget you at all ..Thanks ..Yeh .. right amm Congratulation for your new job thanks Really I've learned a lot … Thanks ،’ Ammmm ؟Can I ask you something? Am I the winner Can if I'm the winner, I can't accept that … I'm sOoOorry I can't accept it really I can't coz I deliver my essay after the time that you give it to us I just want know my mistakes nothing more … I wasn't looking for winning or anything else ؟؟؟Do you understand me SoOoOo, the White Engle is the winner of this amazing competition ،’ I'm surprise that I took the highest marks … Really I feel proud of myself … that I've changed in one year … When I remember myself last year, I found that I was such a beginner in this language… however, I feel now much different that before Con ... Thank you dear ... you are my best teacher ever … May Allah protect you and help you to be in health May Allah reward you for everything you did it for me ،’ Ammmm ؟؟I'm sOoOo happy in this moment … I don't know why ،’ Malak … I congratulate you for being the winner… You deserve the best honey ،’ Miss … You are copy of me before … I've changed I wish I can back to be like you enthusiasm person ... Please be you and don't change honey … since I knew you, you still enthusiasm person … Masha'Allah … May Allah protect you dear … Thank you for your wonderful idea … Thank you from my heart ،’ Raghad ،’

well well well u were so late then. I think I missed that well then it's a 0 out 20 .. but ur E is very very good indeed

[MS.Fabulous]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة رغد محمد ،’ Hello everybody I'm back ... sOoOrry I was taking a rest of everything in my life>>and still I miss you sOoOo much … I want to be honest with you sisters and brother … I'm sOoOo happy that I was participate in this wonderful competition… I learned lots of things Conscientious honey … whenever you are, you are glamour Really since I now you, I became a different person … Thank you dear …Really thank you for everything honey… You are magnificent teacher... I will not forget you my friend... Never ever at all … you the reason after Allah to what I become right now … Thank you honey ...>> crying ،’ English boy … You are amazing teacher …really thank you You made me feel happy with your words … I don't know what to say to both of you except I will pray and pray for both of you… I will not forget you at all ..Thanks ..Yeh .. right amm Congratulation for your new job Really I've learned a lot … Thanks ،’ Ammmm ؟Can I ask you something? Am I the winner Can if I'm the winner, I can't accept that … I'm sOoOorry I can't accept it really I can't coz I deliver my essay after the time that you give it to us I just want know my mistakes nothing more … I wasn't looking for winning or anything else ؟؟؟Do you understand me SoOoOo, the White Engle is the winner of this amazing competition ،’ I'm surprise that I took the highest marks … Really I feel proud of myself … that I've changed in one year … When I remember myself last year, I found that I was such a beginner in this language… however, I feel now much different that before Con ... Thank you dear ... you are my best teacher ever … May Allah protect you and help you to be in health May Allah reward you for everything you did it for me ،’ Ammmm ؟؟I'm sOoOo happy in this moment … I don't know why ،’ Malak … I congratulate you for being the winner… You deserve the best honey ،’ Miss … You are copy of me before … I've changed I wish I can back to be like you enthusiasm person ... Please be you and don't change honey … since I knew you, you still enthusiasm person … Masha'Allah … May Allah protect you dear … Thank you for your wonderful idea … Thank you from my heart ،’ Raghad ،’

Ragad
i miss you dear
i hope you are better now

[الملاك الأبيض]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Conscientious it's not my bussiness , u r the one who mastaked her first and i imitated u looooooool i'll run away

hhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh come on guys u can't be judges with out a price .u really make me lough god bless u

[Conscientious]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة الملاك الأبيض hi every body , actually I'm so thankful for all of ur efforts and especially our judges and teachers con and English boy u were professional in ur correction and and especially con i really thank u for ur great efforts with us may allah bless u all guys :)

ok malak i'll tell u why i considered them wrong according to my point of view

first

actually i didn't notice that u haven't mentioned ramadan yet
also, coz i had known already that it is Ramadan, it seems odd for me when i read ( a whole one month) u know i usaully hear the article (the ) more than (a) a

i'll try to ask and inform u ok , u have a point in this *_^a

second

the V (join) doesn't need a preposition to connect it with the Object

we usually say

join the group , join the relatives ...etc

if i were u i would just say

many families join their relatives in Ramadan
instead of

many families join together with their relatives in Ramadan

together and with have the same meaning so try to avoid repeating words

third which is the most important Q

closeness and support are abstract words so they don't need articles

look more for that thing , we usually treat them like uncountable words

got it ?a

if u have any Q ask English boy, he is the boss here << dilemma

have to leave now see u guys in sha'a Allah

i really enjoyed being with u in this competition

[الملاك الأبيض]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Conscientious ok malak i'll tell u why i considered them wrong according to my point of view first actually i didn't notice that u haven't mentioned ramadan yet also, coz i had known already that it is Ramadan, it seems odd for me when i read ( a whole one month) u know i usaully hear the article (the ) more than (a) a i'll try to ask and inform u ok , u have a point in this *_^a second the V (join) doesn't need a preposition to connect it with the Object we usually say join the group , join the relatives ...etc if i were u i would just say many families join their relatives in Ramadan instead of many families join together with their relatives in Ramadan together and with have the same meaning so try to avoid repeating words third which is the most important Q closeness and support are abstract words so they don't need articles look more for that thing , we usually treat them like uncountable words got it ?a if u have any Q ask English boy, he is the boss here << dilemma have to leave now see u guys in sha'a Allah i really enjoyed being with u in this competition

i got it ,and i won't ask anything further more ,cuz i will be hit by u hhh

no really i understand ur point and thanx for ur explanation

[MS.Fabulous]

con,english boy
i will pray for you guys to become teachers
cus you make great teachers ^_*