رد: the (perfect essay writing) competition
Malak
try to avoid Run-on and fragment by using the proper punctuation between sentences
use the exact words and avoid the general ones like (better people = virtuous people )a
use also connectors between sentences like (for example, however ...etc)a
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MS. Fabulous
the body shouldn't be in a form of paragragh actually the essay needs 2 pharagraghs at least . every one has its won main idea needs to be supprted by details
also be aware of parallelsim
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Suzi
becareful of Run-on
prat of speech - use the adjectives , nouns, verbs in it's proper place like (determination = will- strong or determined also praying = prayer ) e
focus on ur thesis statement ! mention it in the intro , discuss it in the body and rewrite in a different way in the conclusion
be aware of using the propositions like (focus from = focus on )a
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Ragad
be aware of fragment
don't use Coordinate Conjunctions( so , and , but...etc) at the beginning of the sentence but u can substitute them with the Subordinate Conjunctions ( Moreover - therefore - however ...etc )s
be aware of using (who- whom ) in its exact place
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Note - if u are not convinced with anything of my correction please tell me i may mistake u wrongly
Good luck
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