the (perfect essay writing) competition

[MS.Fabulous]

guys Alfata
is going to participate with us he send me a message let us wait for him

[English boy]

Malak

you should be aware of the following:

punctuation mark
find it online and be well-known of using each in the right place

repeating statements
u mentioned the same sentences several times . at least try to avoid using the same words, find synonyms, and paraphrase them

simple grammar errors
capital letters, articles, shaping

I give it = 16 out of 20

[COLOR="rgb(139, 0, 0)"]Suzi[/COLOR]

urs is not much different from Malak:


simple grammar errors
capital letters, articles, shaping

be selective with proper words

try while writing in English not think in Arabic then u translate!! this may confuses u

15 out 20


Fabulous

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urs is quiet good but it has no sense of benefit

I mean only one paragraph is not quiet enough for argument !! u can do much better
rare mistakes but only one peace of info was mentioned in ur essay

only 9 out 20

[COLOR="rgb(139, 0, 0)"]Ragggad[/COLOR]

I have to be honest.. I really really was impressed of urs..

very good shaping, well-organized, only non-mentioned and rare mistakes

well done Raggad, I really liked what've done

this deserves 19 out of 20

[Conscientious]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة English boy Malak I give it = 16 out of 20 [COLOR="rgb(139, 0, 0)"]Suzi[/COLOR] 15 out 20 [/COLOR]

Subhan Allah , wallah i have just noticed that we put the same grades now

it's good that we agreed

i'm afraid that members will think i imitated u

[الفتى]

I'm so sorry for late

this is my essay

as u know, my umbilical cord was cutted in UK

[English boy]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة الفتى I'm so sorry for late this is my essay as u know, my umbilical cord was cutted in UK

are u in the UK.. Oh man if u r close to Essex plz tell me, I really need sth from there plz find me on FB (assem hossen)a I've got to ask u for a favor

[Conscientious]

Malak

try to avoid Run-on and fragment by using the proper punctuation between sentences

use the exact words and avoid the general ones like (better people = virtuous people )a

use also connectors between sentences like (for example, however ...etc)a

16

MS. Fabulous

the body shouldn't be in a form of paragragh actually the essay needs 2 pharagraghs at least . every one has its won main idea needs to be supprted by details

also be aware of parallelsim

13

Suzi

becareful of Run-on

prat of speech - use the adjectives , nouns, verbs in it's proper place like (determination = will- strong or determined also praying = prayer ) e

focus on ur thesis statement ! mention it in the intro , discuss it in the body and rewrite in a different way in the conclusion

be aware of using the propositions like (focus from = focus on )a

15

Ragad

be aware of fragment

don't use Coordinate Conjunctions( so , and , but...etc) at the beginning of the sentence but u can substitute them with the Subordinate Conjunctions ( Moreover - therefore - however ...etc )s

be aware of using (who- whom ) in its exact place

18


Note - if u are not convinced with anything of my correction please tell me i may mistake u wrongly


Good luck

[الفتى]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة English boy are u in the UK.. Oh man if u r close to Essex plz tell me, I really need sth from there plz find me on FB (assem hossen)a I've got to ask u for a favor

loooooool

I'm joking

[English boy]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة الفتى loooooool I'm joking

Ooh god hh man.. I was too excited lolu just want to show off huh .. there's an energy water(blue water) that I used to drink every single day back when I was studying at Essex.. I would buy a bottle even it might cost me a 100$ for each bottle, I don't care.. just want to have it for one more time.. couldn't find anywhere here in KSA

[Conscientious]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة English boy Ooh god hh man.. I was too excited lolu just want to show off huh .. there's an energy water(blue water) that I used to drink every single day back when I was studying at Essex.. I would buy a bottle even it might cost me a 100$ for each bottle, I don't care.. just want to have it for one more time.. couldn't find anywhere here in KSA

does that blue water really give u energy ?a

i'll buy it if this is true

i really need energy

[MS.Fabulous]

yes i saw it now sorry for the misundrestanding^
^_^
i just wanted to till you why i started with a dialogue
thank you again
^_*
hope to see you too^^