I want your advice in my essay.

[cool2011]

l read just first paragrap
I will have finished read your essay by next day, because I don't have time
I think your essay in general is excellent

[بر الأمان]

لكل من مر و رد و شارك شكرا لكم و لنصائحكم
انا اعرف ان هناك بعض الاخطاء و لهذا وددت لو تم تصحيحها لي و تنبيهي عليها
احاول بين فترة و اخري ان اكتب ايسي و لكن هذه المرة وددت ان اعرضه ليصحح و لاتعلم من اخطائي ...
شكرا لكم جميعا و بارك الله لكم في اوقاتكم و عطر ايامكم بالاخبار السعيدة

[Conscientious]

Hiiiiii my sister

it's amazing , see my correction in the attachment

if u have any Q , let me know

good luck

[بر الأمان]

Realy thank you a lot for your correction which was very useful to me.
That make me feel better to show other essay to you.
I hope to you that allah give you health and be right in all time.

[Conscientious]

welcome my dear

yes, u can do that , i'll be happy to help u and all members

Allah bless u