الرجاء والدخول وتصحيح البراقراف

[غروب ج]

Masha Allah you have a lot of vocabulary that is good .I will participate to correct your topic .Firstly where is the controlling idea in your introduction?and do not try to repeat your words like Saudi kingdon later you can use the kingdom .You must use trinsitions words like however ,therefor,thus,then ,for example ...etc.Finally;your conclusion does not good.