writing final draft level 4

[Basma algHamdi]

السلام عليكم ورحمة الله و بركاته ..

آمل منكم أخوتي مساعدتي في كتابة writing final لـ level 4
طلبت منا الدكتورهه :
- تصحيح أخطأنا في writing second
- كتابة نوعين من sentences :
- compound اللي هي indented و فيها
but , and , also
- complex و هي : indented or more indented
و فيها إن كان indented الجملة الأولى نضع , بداية الجملة الثانية
و إن كان indented الجملة الثانية لآ نضع ,

ههذهه صورة writing second





* ععُذراً عن الخط

و هذا writing final

restaurant disaster
i usually visiting the restaurant with my family the weekend
. before three weeks , i decided with my family visit to macdonald's restaurant
, but we didn't the express for this restaurant for many reasons.
fist , despite the food unhealthy and often oilily causing many diseases to our bodies.
another reason is that service is bad . when arrived restaurant ,
waiters aren't take us order , and also employees are slow int work .



أتمنى أن تساعدوني في إكمالة قبل الساعة 11 صباحاً للغد
و شكراً ()..

[* تركي *]

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مافهمت وش تبين صراحة

الصورة كأنها خلاص مصححة بالأحمر ولا ؟ وكمان مش مبينة كويس

والباراقراف الأخير تبينا نصححه ؟

وتبين كمان جملتين وحدة كومباوند ووحدة كومبليكس ؟

[Somaiah Yousef]

وعليكم السلام ورحمة الله وبركاته

كان بودي أساعدك لكن الانجليزي عندي عليه العوض ومنه العوض

ماني متأكدة لكن حاسة إنه الجمل في الفاينل درافت ماهي مربوطة :|

Restaurant Disaster

I usually visiting the restaurant with my family ( in ) the weekend
Before three weeks , I decided with my family ( to visit ) Macdonald's restaurant but we didn't the express for this restaurant for many reasons
First , despite the food unhealthy and often oilily ( oily ) causing many diseases to our bodies.
Second reason is that ( the ) service is ( was ) bad . when ( we ) arrived ( the ) restaurant ,
the ) waiters aren't ( weren't ) take ( took ) us ( our ) order . ( They let us waiting for long time ). Also employees are ( were ) slow int ( while they doing their ) work ) .

The most important reason that we saw a small insect in our food . So , that was a difficult thing we cannot ignoring.

At the end, we swear that dont come again to this resturant

إن شاء الله يكون خالي من الأخطاء الاملائية والنحوية

السكند درافت ماهو واضح ف مآقريته

إيه صح يفضل إنتس تغيري اسم المطعم بما اني شوهت سمعته


إن شاء الله يفيدوك الاخوان اكثر

[Somaiah Yousef]

على فكرة .. but , and , or من الخطأ إنك تبدأي فيها الجملة

هذا على حسب تصحيح أستاذتي الترم اللي راح

شفتك بدأتي فيها جملتين وكدا ف قلت انبهك

طبعا هي تجي في نص الكلام بس

[SoJustMe]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة فيونكـه وعليكم السلام ورحمة الله وبركاته كان بودي أساعدك لكن الانجليزي عندي عليه العوض ومنه العوض ماني متأكدة لكن حاسة إنه الجمل في الفاينل درافت ماهي مربوطة :| Restaurant Disaster I usually visiting the restaurant with my family ( in ) the weekend Before three weeks , I decided with my family ( to visit ) Macdonald's restaurant but we didn't the express for this restaurant for many reasons First , despite the food unhealthy and often oilily ( oily ) causing many diseases to our bodies. Second reason is that ( the ) service is ( was ) bad . when ( we ) arrived ( the ) restaurant , the ) waiters aren't ( weren't ) take ( took ) us ( our ) order . ( They let us waiting for long time ). Also employees are ( were ) slow int ( while they doing their ) work ) . The most important reason that we saw a small insect in our food . So , that was a difficult thing we cannot ignoring. At the end, we swear that dont come again to this resturant إن شاء الله يكون خالي من الأخطاء الاملائية والنحوية السكند درافت ماهو واضح ف مآقريته إيه صح يفضل إنتس تغيري اسم المطعم بما اني شوهت سمعته إن شاء الله يفيدوك الاخوان اكثر

I usually go to the restaurant with my family ( at ) the weekend
Before three weeks , I ( went to ) Macdonald's restaurant with my family, but I didn't like the service there for many reasons.
.First, the food is unhealthy which often ( oily - fatty) and that causes many diseases to our bodies

Second, ( the ) service ( was ) very bad and when ( we ) arrived ( to ) ( the ) restaurant,
the waiters ( didn't ) take ( our ) order quickly, they let us waiting for ( a ) long time . Also employees ( were ) very slow ( while they doing their ) job to serve us.

عاد ماعتقتها زين ان شاء الله تفيدك كثيير

[SoJustMe]

I usually go to the restaurant with my family ( at ) the weekend

Before three weeks, I ( went to ) Macdonald's restaurant with my family to have dinner, but I didn't like the service there for many reasons.

.First, the food is unhealthy (which) often ( oily - fatty) and that (causes) many diseases to our bodies

Second, ( the ) services ( were ) very bad and slow becuase when ( we ) arrived ( to ) ( the ) restaurant

the waiters ( didn't ) take ( our ) order quickly, they let us waiting for ( a ) long time . Also the ( employees - restaurant workers ) ( were ) very slow ( while they were doing their ) job to serve us.

وخلي الموضوع ( Bad Service ) أو (Bad Dinner )

هذا كمان راجعيها بعدي لاني قاعد اداكر احصاء وحبيت اغير جو خخخخخ

وفيه اللي بين قوسين وكلمتين هذا تأكدي منها أو اختاري باللي يناسبك أعتقد كلمة موظف ماتنقال بالمطعم وكمان زيتي ماتنقال على الاكل بس مدري ادا تخارج ولا لا اعتبرها كلها صح
وكمان عندي سؤال ؟؟ انت أخذتي مستوى اول وتاني وثالث ولا على طول على الثلث والرابع او مدري وش من هالكلام خخخ

وبالتوفيق يارب ولا تنسي تدعيلي ف الدنيا والاخرة واني اجيب 40 في الاحصاء وفي كل المواد ان شاء الله
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[SoJustMe]

Before three weeks, I ( went to ) Macdonald's restaurant with my family to have dinner, but I didn't like the service there for many reasons.

.First, the food is unhealthy (which) often ( oily - fatty) and that (causes) many diseases to our bodies

Second, ( the ) services ( were ) very bad and slow becuase when ( we ) arrived ( to ) ( the ) restaurant

the waiters ( didn't ) take ( our ) order quickly, they let us waiting for ( a ) long time . Also the ( employees - restaurant workers ) ( were ) very slow ( while they were doing their ) job to serve us.
Finally, it was dirty.

[Basma algHamdi]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة * تركي * / مافهمت وش تبين صراحة الصورة كأنها خلاص مصححة بالأحمر ولا ؟ وكمان مش مبينة كويس كنت حابه تصحيح الاخطاأ اللي بالصورة .. والباراقراف الأخير تبينا نصححه ؟ كنت حابه تساعدوني بكتابة المزيد .. وتبين كمان جملتين وحدة كومباوند ووحدة كومبليكس ؟ الزايدهه فيها من انواع هذهه الجمل ..

لكن شكراً ع بقية الاعضاء ()"

[Basma algHamdi]

فيونكة ، sojust me
شكراً لكم من القلب أحبتي
ربي يسعدكم و يرزقكم الدرجات العاليةة

Sojust me
ربي ييسر لك الإحصاء
و الفل مارك ببقية المواد يارب ()"

[SoJustMe]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Basma algHamdi فيونكة ، sojust me شكراً لكم من القلب أحبتي ربي يسعدكم و يرزقكم الدرجات العاليةة Sojust me ربي ييسر لك الإحصاء و الفل مارك ببقية المواد يارب ()"

امين يارب ربي يسمع منك
على فكرة انا سويت ردود كثيرة لان كل شوي انسى جملة هههههه
حتى اخر وحدة نسيت البداية وكتبت النهاية هههههههه

I usually go to the restaurant with my family ( at ) the weekend
Before three weeks, I ( went to ) Macdonald's restaurant with my family to have dinner, but I didn't like the service there for many reasons.

.First, the food is unhealthy (which) often ( oily - fatty) and that (causes) many diseases to our bodies

Second, ( the ) services ( were ) very bad and slow becuase when ( we ) arrived ( to ) ( the ) restaurant

the waiters ( didn't ) take ( our ) order quickly, they let us waiting for ( a ) long time . Also the ( employees - restaurant workers ) ( were ) very slow ( while they were doing their ) job to serve us.
Finally, it was dirty.